YDK - i read ur piece twice yesterday and a 3rd time today and i'm still not sure what is being examine. Was it a personification of a deck of card? if so what's with the reference to Chinese history and Caesar. They had card games back then? Or was it supposed to be a play on the king cards? But on a positive note, i dug some of the wordplay. And thought the idea was pretty dope, ultimately. good shit.
Frank - great verse my man. You can very well use all kind of card idioms to decribe the concept of this verse - "Life dealing a hand", "lost in the shuffle" etc, it was a very well-written piece. Great story progression and the writing mechanics was up there. I don't really have too much complaints.
Vote - Frank. I thought the writing was a little more advance. Kuhn's my dude and is always showing improvement but Frank's also a seasoned vet so it's hard to beat someone of that calibre.
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