Breath - i like this, man. Really dug your take on the picture. A man's home is his castle but this family/home is shadowed by dark clouds. It was a pretty personal piece. I think it paints (no pun intended) a blurred visual of a frustrated individual who isn't quite sure of the direction he's heading in life, pointing to domestic raising as part of the reason? I used the word blurred because i don't think the author was clear on reason behind his predicament - even alluding to fate:
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There's more to this guy's mind than what's stored behind scorned eyelids
but what's important, is why, its in the form of divine silence.
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Technically speaking i thought this was ill. Lots of slants but the rhyming was, IMO, impressive. The rhythm was definitely there, i thought. This was a great showing and quite a leap from last week's verse. salute my man.
Inno - Dope,dawgie. This pic was made specifically for ur style. First off, I really think you should cultivate this style. It has your trademark "poetic" you just need to up the technical aspect of text writing and you'll be a force to reckon. My minor issue here is that it relied almost entirely on end-rhyme. I'm not a lyrical snob and can easily overlook technical flaw (or more appropriately 'weakness') but with ur penchant for wording, I have to let u know that if u have the rhyming mechanic to match...you'd be pretty scary for anybody to be matched up against. As far as content, it's a very dope homage to "home". Not sure if it's used metaphorically to describe your affection for your family or a straight forward tribute to your environment, whatever the case is, it was written full of affection which i'm sure was the intent.
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Innovator. I thought Breathless had a more creative take on the picture but overall execution, i got Innovator taking it based on enjoyment and vibe.