YDK piece was dope considering how short it was, that thing really packed a punch, I didn't think he played safe at all - one of his best assets has always been his creativity, length to his drops has never really been Kuhn's thing tbh, but he doesn't rely on it because he has a genuine rich pool of ideas that he seems to bring together. I loved the heros/myths and spade/diamonds lines. they were worded really nice, to the point even though I know the ideas been used before, it still came off fresh to me. the tie in to the coffin/pack of cards at the end was illy too, really creative take on the picture given I thought, this guy deserves his props!
FRANK is frank, always had a natural knack for this shit, loved the flow to this joint, it just rolls off the tongue (keyboard) as he must have been writing it... the whole thing runs smoothly, almost like a keystyle from top to bottom, where he maintains the same multi string and just tees off on a topic, taking his own sweet time to get to any point he wants to make, not worrying about the length of the piece, just simply doing him until he's done and ready to let you move on, it's awesome. this is how you should be writing. his battle days may be behind him, but he still loves throwing in a punchline or four to keep the readers interest which is unusual to see in topicals tbh. frank does it well,
These weren’t exactly the sharpest tools in the shed,
just some state pens that dripped when they slit you
ugh, that's grimey as fuck...
Or see me reflecting on hard times, holding mirrors through these bars....
dope line right there
great ending too, almost similar to what YDK did in effect, but at the same time wholly different. overall I think frank got him, not so much in terms of originality or creativity because that's where I felt YDK shone and he excels frank in that field here, but frank just had a more developed piece, with dialogue and characterisation, which obv. YDK couldn't have as a pack of cards as stupid as that sounds, but it does add another dimension to your writing when you do have that which is why I find it of such importance and give the ctredit where its due to the writers in here that are doing it, and doing it well... feel me? anyway, enough rambled from the keyboard, i'm hungover this morning, but frank got this for me... sorry Kuhn!
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