ydk,
I've caused many men to perish hidden distant in time,
I gave you faith when others suffered; so I tripled your dime.
Crippled by selfishness i'll drive a spade through your heart,
With the promise of diamonds that I gave from the start.
I've devalued kings and queens; knaves were never. brave enough,
They have all fell victim to a bluff of a family more pure in flush.
Consumed by need I've tolerated smokey rooms and weed,
Till I lay face down on the floor desperate and doomed by greed.
above was my favorite from you. i liked your take on the topic and all the little card suite references through out. thought it was a bit of a safe route but was still pulled off very nicely.
frank,
''I aint convinced I’m a convict..
In conflict with the grimiest cons on the continent..."
consequence in each contest
He said "I got five maybe six and a poss, shiit.. lets just say 6 books
Oh and Frank.. I needa copy of your 6th book"
Deal again I got 10 someone else said reshuffling
kings and queens like a fairytale flip-book
"Yous a slick crook!...
Cards like superman-flying trying to save you and cradle the land
with a clear shot of hearts, cupid pulled something fatal from his band
Nine of diamonds blinded him, with Draino from the damned
Little jokers cuttin’ a hundred degrees like a molten man
Medulla Oblongata spilling lava from a molded can
cold hearts, melting puddles where the frozen ran
Gambit throwing hands... cool as a Japanese folding fan
above was my favorite portions of your verse. this was a smooth fuckin read man, no complaints from meabout this one. really liked the creative direction you went with this one as well.
I enjoyed both of these. thought you both wrote good pieces this week, i'm going to give it to frank though because i enjoyed his just a little more
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