Jah Homie vs. Sharp Nine
http://artofbattling.com/forum/showt...chi-S9-Collab)
Sharp uses alot of current event punches, multis are a little basic sometimes
Wordings not bad, he just has a lot of decent lines..havent seen many that screamed haymaker to me.
his lines are short, almost 'too short for liking'
what you should do. this site tends eat up good name plays..theres a bunch for sharp nine, also be creative as possible to offset the fact that hes probably gonna use a current event punch or just use one your self
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SHARP NINE
Be ready to drop us your drops - my battle w/ bleak you PMed me about (keyed, but I thought it was alright), a flex collab with Malachi that he has atm and will drop sometime soon, and I kept every battle/collab verse I did on NC in a notepad doc so I'll have those ready as needed
Be ready to drop your backdrop - skill/evolution wise, a couple bullets on "where you were", "where you are now" (biggest strength AND opportunity)
Was: incredibly awkward with wording, completely neglectful of rhyming (single and slant rhymes mostly) and flow but decent with nameflips. basic wordplay related to forum events/sports/big news began to grow out of that
Now: Better worded, though concepts (particularly nameplays and personals) are pretty clearly my strength. I don't really focus on wording or flow - I feel like those are less necesary and don't really do enough non-battle stuff to develop it. I'm more entertained by a well-worded funny concept than a verse that flows smoothly but isn't really anything interesting.
Tbc I'm pursuing a degree in music and have a well-honed sense of time and rhythm - I've spent way more time with a metronome in the past 3 years than most will in all of their lives. I just don't consider this a hugely important part of a battle - you may notice that gamble voted against me for inconsistent flow and not really having "schemes" against bleak. I agree because 1. it was keyed, 2. I just think of what I do as making dick jokes - its a fun "fuck you", not an artistic statement to me.
What makes the best better than the rest? what makes a good writer in your opinion
Like I said up there, I feel like a strongly worded and clever punch is what does it. I don't really think of myself as the creative type, definitely not a writer. I don't really go for any of that "artistic expression" stuff, though I respect guys who do it well.
Raising the bar for the ones we drop what is the SINGLE most important area you'd like to improve as a writer (creativity, wording, wordplay, imagery, wording without sacrificing flow/flowing without sacrificing wording, etc.......)
I'd like to be able to make more effective personals as well as just generic bars, ones that could work for any opponent. I feel like I need to improve my filler just as much as my actual bars.
What you plan to PUT IN and hope to be the OUT PUT? how do you think you will help be a solid supporter of this cause --- and what is the NUMBER ONE thing you hope to get out of this process?
I plan on giving honest feedback based around the goals of everyone else involved as well as a decent amount of writing. I feel like from voting/feeding I've gotten a good sense of what I like in a verse and what I want to have my verses (not) be.
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some good tidbits of info in here