[Mr. J]

Clutter, your piece was fluid and had a nice touch to it's storytelling
great storytelling in fact, I got caught up in the piece as soon as I read deeper into it
the rhymes were perfectly written to keep me interested in the story
and it flowed together very nicely, a great drop in my opinion..

Scripter, tbh you came off as unhinged...you didn't seem focused here
you had some nice ideas but didn't execute as thorough as I expected
it seemed like you just wanted to throw something out there...
if you had added a more potent piece by adding more than a few simple lines
you may have given your opponent a battle...


v/Clutter