[Mr. J]

Both had some a nice approach to what they were writing about
due to the landscaping you both had a chance to make your story open-ended
which is a good way to handle a piece such as this

Breathless, It seems like you are finding your stride now
which is good because it shows in your writing as you progress
you had some nice couplets as well as a flow to match it
I feel your skill is really starting to showcase itself as you continue on
your piece reflected the ideal of a person living in this village
and it came out great, you added some nice imagery as well
it kept the piece fresh..

Innovator, You had a very visual approach to your piece
you took the picture as is and really added to the landscape
it gave it an ideal feel as you wrote further into the piece
I felt that you focused more on the vibe of the town rather a person
which is great in my eyes, it adds a different aspect to the battle

tbh I enjoyed both pieces and one's approach was different from the other
which really makes this battle based on the better approach
I feel Breathless came in and added character to a picture of the village
while Innovator gave the effects of the village, I quite enjoyed that
but when it comes down to it, I feel Innovator was more thorough with his idea

v/Innovator