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Old 02-14-2013, 08:53 PM   #10
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This was a weird battle
Well, maybe not..

Deadman straight killed the visuals and subtle drops of wordplay and metas. Very sound well written verse worthy of being entirely qouted imo.

C.d.m. ..veritas?
Whoever.
You really hurt yourself with the repettious antonio throughout the verse. The story that went with it seemed like it was cool, allthough hard to tie into the pic. And I feel like you destroyed all hopes of creating any flow and rhythm. The storyline was hard to follow because of this and reading the word antonio over and over again got on my nerves early. If you are veritas... I know you capable of waaaaay better than this.

Easy win in my eyes.

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