Mentally engaging and fluid piece. I'll echo oxus here and say that I felt this was a rather fragmented drop; freeflowing scattered although far higher than average mental energy. For a freeverse it was excellent, you have a strong command of the English language, you're creative and you have some very pointed ideas that recur in your verses. I can see the Black D. imitation which isn't a bad thing, he's the best writer here. stay up
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