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Eŋg · 10-08-2013, 09:35 PM

in fairness, i like tropicals when they're done like this. you opened with a respectful, reflective tone, and when that focus shifted, you displayed your attention to detail with aplomb. very good handle on language, generally: your shit reads smoothly and has a good cadence, to boot. love that you used the term God's Breath -- inspirae. you change the angle of the lens, so to speak, twice after that.

hmm

touch unsure if the three segments were different people, or all parts of a whole. might have missed something there, i concede, should re-read but i'm a dick. liked the writing though: you're skilled.

http://netcees.co/showthread.php?t=14924

this is me.

10-08-2013, 09:35 PM	#7
Eŋg rhyme capsule. Join Date: Sep 2018 Posts: 2,150 Rep Power: 0	in fairness, i like tropicals when they're done like this. you opened with a respectful, reflective tone, and when that focus shifted, you displayed your attention to detail with aplomb. very good handle on language, generally: your shit reads smoothly and has a good cadence, to boot. love that you used the term God's Breath -- inspirae. you change the angle of the lens, so to speak, twice after that. hmm touch unsure if the three segments were different people, or all parts of a whole. might have missed something there, i concede, should re-read but i'm a dick. liked the writing though: you're skilled. http://netcees.co/showthread.php?t=14924 this is me.