flawless piece man, except to be real honest I didn't like the italic single lined portions although I understand why you added them. i just think it was an abrupt pause in a somewhat seamless story but that's just petty critique.
This is the superstar, strapped to the leg press,
his back and thighs aching from ravaging 10-sets.
It's in his eyes. He can't escape the image of buckling,
the knee twisted and crumbling, physically humbling.
The superstar was exquisite at jumping, a marvel of grace
now harnessing pain in hopes of discarding this brace.
now i played basketball and football through high school and college so pretty much immediately this brought me back to those days ok trying to recoup from a twisted ankle or hyper extended knee lol
This is the superstar, returning to work.
He still turns with a jerk on his spin move, learning the twerk
on his new knee ligament, concerning at first.
But the surgeon had words, swearing he'd soon be swinging it.
This is not an end. This is the superstar, focusing tight,
honing his flight and proving he still can go to his right.
This is the superstar practicing, staying late on the clock.
That which doesn't kill him only improves the range on his shot.
The days fade into blots. Six to nine months turns to a year.
This is the superstar, the new season, emerging from tears.
lol'ed at learning to twerk haha
ok so i really did enjoy this piece and i don't know if you want just feed or critique but the only thing I can say to improve thiswould be to add just a little more emotion to it so it's not as bland, don't get me wrong, flow/development/mechanical everythingwas on point it was just a little lackadaisical. but I did enjoy it none the less. stay up man and if you get a chance maybe you could peep my no show piece? thanks
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