yea, i like this.
I think the most impressive thing about this piece was your detailed understanding of battle formation (or at least you appeared to be lol). The character was very likable. He was drawn with a shade of naivete and ambition that carried him to glory...almost like a war time coming of age thing. It's not often i enjoy a story - with the usual recycled plot line and shit like that, but this was refreshing. Dialogue, imagery, and rhyming were all done very well. Definitely like your brand of writing as i can tell you put a lot of thoughts into you craft, something we can all respect. good shit man.
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