Respect on the votes and advice, I definitely need to work on my story style, never was my strong suit, Generally I just take an abstract view on a topical level, I'll give a saga a go this week though
And man, I didn't think that "won't last, nope" thing was so bad, I thought it rhymed fine, the nope was an unexpressed segue... "hundred to no chance" "comin home" "done but it won't last"... It's difficult to translate atypical flow to text, here's a quick a Capella...
http://soundcloud.com/dancourser/sou...rce=soundcloud
Is anyone opposed to me dropping an audio like this with my pieces or would that be considered vote swaying?