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WOW.

one of my favorite pieces ever from NYC. your diction/ vocab is very characteristic, like a lake placid mug of hot chocolate. Imagery was spot on, and really built the plot at the same time while painting a picture.. I feel like the small verse at the beginning and end made this into sort a mobius strip story. we end up where we were but inverted. What is that type of poem, where you repeat the same two couplets in intervals but chnge the context evrry verse? this was a better version of that.

I imagine this was a really dark take on the giving tree. in that context it actually makes perfect sense lol, like you took a prewritten story and simply fleshed it out with ideas. HOW VERY NOVELIST OF YOU. pretty clever, next week ima do that with the Magic Treehouse


VULGAR.

lol. mindfuck. really dope take.. even a better devil/ god bargain idea than the Faustian bargain. did you come up with this yourself, the basic concept? very impressive. the writing was top notch as usual, too.. sometimes the rhymes felt a little forced and perhaps Zygote-esque in their plot over delivery style. nice, nonetheless.

While I really love NYC's verse, it really has nothing to do with quitting or winning or perserverance... which is a feat in itself. I appreciate his writing methods/ description s, but Vulgar definitely outwrote him in the battle sense.


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