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Frank · 10-06-2013, 10:03 PM

PankcakeBra
Opinning? As in conjunction of Opinion + opening. Blurred lines there. 'Sink into wine' smooth transition there. Casted shell over meditative yolk??/? you drinking cappuccino or whiskey when you write this shit? mellow dramatic sap, trudged through it - even with the momentous finale of dwindling mayhem, which still glided to a complete stop instead of splashing. Art to such daintyness, verse was so soft it couldn't hurt a fly, in context with the concept given it could be a mechanism or simply a blunder.

Keithz A.I.M
Barbaric tone , not too keen , but savage in language, not finess, more methmethodical. The rhyming was was hit or miss but the brutality aspect attacked the topic head on.grid iron toughness to this verse that joe Nameth wouldve co-signed

Vote - Keithz Aim

10-06-2013, 10:03 PM	#11
Frank Senior Member Join Date: Oct 2001 Posts: 3,228 Champed - NWL Season 2 - Art of Writing League (5x) - Lime Green Poetry Association - AOWL Season 6 - AOWL Season 10 Rep Power: 3853347	PankcakeBra Opinning? As in conjunction of Opinion + opening. Blurred lines there. 'Sink into wine' smooth transition there. Casted shell over meditative yolk??/? you drinking cappuccino or whiskey when you write this shit? mellow dramatic sap, trudged through it - even with the momentous finale of dwindling mayhem, which still glided to a complete stop instead of splashing. Art to such daintyness, verse was so soft it couldn't hurt a fly, in context with the concept given it could be a mechanism or simply a blunder. Keithz A.I.M Barbaric tone , not too keen , but savage in language, not finess, more methmethodical. The rhyming was was hit or miss but the brutality aspect attacked the topic head on.grid iron toughness to this verse that joe Nameth wouldve co-signed Vote - Keithz Aim __________________ *VETWORK* Last edited by Frank; 10-06-2013 at 10:06 PM.