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Old 10-06-2013, 04:36 PM   #14
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This is another close match up here as with the Vivid/YDK battle. Breathless, you had some lines in there I thought was pretty cool, but a couple negatives stand out more than the positives: for one the direction of your piece seems a bit non-existent in relation to the topic. If you incorporated it, you didn't do a fairly good job. It feels as if your piece is missing key elements to deliver the message, though you had some moments that showed such, but not enough. Mr. J, your piece was solid overall, and for me it resonates sort of like YDK's piece where you managed and tackled the basic elements of a topical piece. You had better content here and I believe you conveyed not only the message but also the topic much better than your opponent did.


MVGT: Mr. J. Good job by both competitors.
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