[Objective]

Pancake: You present the usual steez in your shit. Not your greatest work by far but it's definitely cool in my book, the concept was cool and in some way it's relatable. The last paragraph really puts the topic given in the spotlight and everything makes sense.

King Ra: Back from the dead! At last! And it's a pleasure to read your shit again. It got great flow and I can sense the feel of victory after a long battle and how nothing hurts with this one. However, I didn't really like the Sepiroth's sword thing, it seemed out of place to me. Beside of that shit was cool and I kinda visioned some kind of animè style thing in my head as I kept reading. Could perhaps have talked more about her agenda or at least given your character a better story, why she's fighting etc. I'd like to know more about her, but in regards of the topic it was on point and I enjoyed it.

Vote: I think it's pretty close. I really dug King Ra's atmosphere in his entire verse and how he wrapped up the topic given, I could definitely feel what he got going. Pancake Brah had a creative plot as well, but I felt it lacked something.. Can't really put my finger on it, perhaps it's the fact that I didn't really know what the issues between the main character and Nikole is all about, some more story would definitely bring more justice to it.. Ye.

Overall I thought King Ra had a more interesting and entertaining story overall. With a better story or more info about what the ish was all about Pancake would have taken my vote. Decent battle (as opposed to what I know both of you can write).