Both of you did a great job here with this topic and I feel this was very close & difficult to pick who I believe gets my vote.
Vivid, a very intelligent, captivating piece in which you really put some good emphasis on points throughout with some solid lines that made this stand out. For some reason the ending, as plain as it is kinda made me think a little in relation to the entire piece, but that's what I would call that icing on the cake (not necessarily the cherry on top). While you put together some good lines, for me there were some hiccups in the presentation of some areas where I had to go back & read to catch the flow. This occurred mainly in the beginning, I found myself stumbling before picking up. The style is pretty fresh but I guess it could be cleaner.
YDK, you went more on the "safe" route concept wise in what reads simply as a letter to someone (but actually comes even as directed to someone but personally for you) on some self realization level, and while this is something that can easily be done by anyone in writing, I actually liked the way your piece came out from the beginning to end. It flowed very well and I felt it is much cleaner than Vivid's piece. Now there are some issues. You managed to have a few lines that were really cool but then there were some of those basic turn-offs- those lines where some creativity would really had helped bring this out more. You had a couple of those so in comparison to your opponents work it does work against you. Aside from that, I understood your approach to the topic more, despite the simplicity of it compared to Vivid, though his execution conceptually was more complex.
As I mentioned before this one was hard for me because you both did better than the other in different areas and had about the same hiccups as well. I feel both of you tackled this topic very well. This is really based on preference for me- I feel YDK took that safer route here & my first instinct after the first read through was YDK- but looking at everything more in-depth, I'm gonna have to give this one to Vivid, for the more creative approach and execution, just barely.
MVGT: Vivid. Good job by both competitors.
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