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Old 10-05-2013, 10:35 AM   #12
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so I read this last week and I actually didn't know you got no showed. sucks man, this was fuckin epic. each time i see a piece from you I am more impressed. you have developed into a legit multi machine. I know everytime I read your pieces the flow will be impeccable and that I WILL BE ENTERTAINED. no different here

"Ken, breathe, all right?"
Just then he seas a sea of light dream a beam of flight
To a rock now deemed to teem with life in the perfect position,
Circular suspensions align to supply vertical dimensions,
And plants arrive confined to a fertile existence
That flies by in a merciful sentence,
The he seas the sea of light retrieve and ignite a herbal incense
That causes the rock to swirl and spin winds creating terminal tensions
Til it quakes and slides and breaks and widens
To form lakes and islands that create the horizon


this part was dope, my only critique and its a small one at that is the way you spelled fuckes seas... my dude it's see's. that shit irritates me, its 2013 playa, we all got spellcheck ahahaha jk jk yea but for real illy piece man. stay up and thanks for the feed
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