[breathless]

Well, this was a rather odd pair of pieces to decide on

one with an absurd premise but basically flawless until
"Shit...This just got weird I'm going home," Mary says rubbing her sticky hands But when she stands red and blue light appear on the road And Terry screams, "Fuck!! I can't be here!! I'm stoned!! .......NoOoOOoOOoOOooOooOoOoOooOOooo!!!!!......... '

Especially since you used an apostrophe instead of a quotation mark at the end
But seriously, that reminded me of the old dre/eminem guilty conscience song's segues, but it was done poorly and after that it was like you just wrapped it up with a bunch of meh

This though
So with a thrust he grabbed her head and kissed her cheek,
Then laughter spread between them as they laid against the leaves
On the water tower perch of Hensley's Creek, Up fifty feet
and experiencing the day they had both wished to see,
And living in a trance, Suddenly Mary rubs Terry's dick with her hands
And instantly...He jizzed in his pants...

That's epic rhyming, flow, set, setting, characters, background...and then, softcore porn?...
Like, come on man, cut the dick and jizz, and hymen and hairy balls, and this was grade a+ lyricism, and then you finished it out lackadaisically, this woulda been a easy pick with good closing lines

And then innovator

This was my type of piece, but down without enough gusto
From the getgo it was a nice Fallout 3 postapocalypse feel, excellent imagery, but the flow was sorta asymmetric to the point where it was hard to keep fluid. Somewhat lacking on the extreme multies which is really what pulls a style like this together, I mean, you had some, but the expressed syllables weren't ordered right in a lot of spots

Promise of the future left a wanting of now to resonate
to reverberate so a better foundation can cultivate.
But they over bait the fish and overstate their debate over why its extinct.
A popular notion to populate with disgrace
misplaced ambitions dictates the pace

You needed some more hard Es in there to make extinct flow right, or a slight change like

Promise of the future left a wanting of now to resonate
to reverberate so a better foundation can cultivate.
But they over bait the fish and overstate their debate over why there's a higher rate of extinction
A popular notion to populate with disgrace misplaced ambitions dictates the pace of achievements

Doing that brings the flow together by using reciprocal sound rhymes (1over2state their de2bate 1over 3why there's a 3higher) strung back to the main sound rhyme, then followed with a multisyllable cadence nonrhyme "2rate of extinction" A "popular notion", see how the don't rhyme, but they flow the same, that's some Shakespeare shit son...

And then you did it again with
Fastlanes and airplanes, not bass lanes and grass plains
just glass stains and headaches and coffee stains.

I got where you where going, no coffee plants growing, caffeine headaches, stained coffee cups, actually really nice imaginative reference, but it needed something else

Anyway, I could pick this apart but its more of the same, pretty much, innovator had too many minor flaws that became major and Zen had enough perfection that his couple major flaws were minor

VOTE - Zen