Great battle guys. my fuckin phone failed to post so i guess i'm voting on this twice :/
Zen- your brand of storytelling is both refreshing and entertaining. The schemes were pretty neat and you captured the topic while building a scenario around it. Though the simplicity kinda urked me, the schemes and syllable matching came through and made it a seamless read. The second half seemed a lil rushed or lazily crafted, as the style was obviously different and not as well-constructed. Overall, your writing personality is the crowd controller. you managed to keep my attention and that didn't go unnoticed. Good job.
Inno- This is more my preferred type of reading, as it was descriptive and abstract. This was a solid piece due to your grasp of the main idea and your application of the topic toward your interpreted subject matter. there was a lot of potential here where your piece came through(i.e. storytelling) and places where you fell kinda flat(lack of emotional display; some syllable scheme misses; monotonous descriptive pattern in a few places). Overall, i saw your effort and i appreciated this piece for what i thought you put into it.
This was one of the battles i read like 6 times just so i could make a decision. Zen chose anecdotal procedure and it worked well with the flawless scheme execution. Great job guys and thanks for showing. MVGT Zen
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