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Old 10-04-2013, 09:26 PM   #7
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as stated before this was a great battle, really enjoyed both pieces

My smile skewed, a denial misconstrued, all the while, nil was news.
the Brady wiles of a child in censored group, was as a rented suit-
For the eventual parental coup would bear relentless fruit...

meanwhile--Up for trial... the spilled abused, the pill misused, the ill get views...
fucking sickening... the mills that mill the wills of shrews...
the eels that feign the couth in deals for the peels of youth.
this feel was surreal, as I appealed, revealed in proof.
the suburban safe haven in tame statement syndicated's what congealed in you.
But still... what did you continually do?!


vivid, haven't read much from you, being gone for awhile and all but I was impressed. flow was obviously on point, vocab was above par and you had some really dope concepts. my only thing is I think in some parts you sacrifices a more clear though for flow and vise versa. in a few places It came almost a chore to read and the same rhyme scheme became a bit monotonous, still all in all I enjoyed your take on the topic and your execution


YDK, sup man haven't read anything from you in a bit either. well I enjoyed your piece it definitely kept me entertained, I just don't really see the connection with your verse and the topic too much. I mean I know what you were shooting for but in a topical battle playing to the topic is key


Reflecting back on how I didn't regret my actions, wow,
Never would have thought cheating would have such little satisfaction now.
I had never been loved like that before,
Never once felt important or that i was THAT adored.
I've never been on the opposite end of the unrequited side,
Until I broke your heart an made me feel like shit inside.


I blame my past, all my lame ex's and whores,
For taking away my innocence the same way I took yours.

^^^this line was clutch


ok so i'm going to go with who bored me the least, not saying either piece was bad because it's really quite the opposite but I felt like I just enjoyed YDK's verse more and was more into it, so MVGT=YDK

good battle guys
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