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Old 10-04-2013, 02:01 PM   #5
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Vague- I loved the wording that you used in this except for a few instances but the main one that stood out to me was the 'to eww to chew' line. It just seems with all of these 'big words' floating around this piece that it seemed a little awkward imo. Besides those few hiccups I don't really see any problems. The flow was top notch as was the content. Good job.
YDK- If I gotta be honest with you, I didn't really enjoy this too much. Last week you brought it but this weak this just felt a little weak to me. Don't get me wrong the content and the way you took especially considering the topic, but it just didn't hit the way I thought it would after what I considered to be a strong showing from you last week.

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