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I enjoyed reading both pieces very much!

Vividlyvague - You continue to impress me! You started out talking about self love through abstinence, I liked this approach. It gave an idea of what type of self love you were trying to describe. Your word play and use of multies were also impeccable.

"And so it began... the upward spiral, inverted, introverted...
The wholesome wholesale... this worth was merchant, purchased...
ugly duckling suckling... with a father urging purpose,
...membership to the virgin surplus....
the stirring herds of currs cursed us, as we were yet uninvited,
legs like that of a good shepard's attention- undivided."

I like how you changes the feel and direction in the next part negating the verse before it. Great set up!

"My smile skewed, a denial misconstrued, all the while, nil was news.
the Brady wiles of a child in censored group, was as a rented suit-
For the eventual parental coup would bear relentless fruit..."

You seemed to capture the subject in this piece well. I enjoyed reading it!


YDK - I really liked your piece! You had a great opening bar, that I felt did a great job of setting the mood. It gave an impression of a lack of love for ones self. I felt this was a great approach, since when you are in love it becomes harder to see the lack of love for yourself. Some times we let the we love walk all over us.

"Sittin alone contemplating in my 2 bedroom apartment,
Heart hardened, unrequited love got me feeling retarded.
Its such a conundrum I need ta stop starting,
I've been played so much that I need to start charging!"

I believe this part helps to put things together in a understanding that when people get hurt they hurt others and them selves. They show love for them selves by not letting anyone hurt them ever again.

"Its all a cruel circle,
one person gets hurt and we all fall in line,
I just wish that you hadn't ever had to fall in mine.
I never intended to hurt you or have "bad" in mind,
Other than when I saw you an thought "damn she's fine!"
I guess this is my way of apologizing for how I acted before,
Sprinkling subtle compliments on a subject that's sore.
I'll end it by saying I love myself more than those whores ever did,
But my respect for you is enormous for putting up with my shit."

I believe both pieces were excellent! Although I believe Vividlyvague did a better job of exploring the subject as far as displaying different perspectives of what self love is.

Vote - Vividlyvague