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I agree with Dove these pieces do seem to have an alike flow.

breathless - I believe you did a great job of describing the topic. Although toward the end it seems a little less focused.

I really like this bar because it uses a multi and the word play does a great job of describing detail.

"I think I've just had my last epiphany.
Watched the wrinkles of my past fold back to a different me."

This was probably my favorite part. It gives a up and down feel, which describes the topic well and you managed to create a visual as well.

"This is where the middle meets the means to the ends.
You'll know it once the little things show their meaning through the end.
When you hit the peak, realize its the highest you can fall from,
and understand that landin' on rock bottom isn't when its all done."

Mr. J - I believe you had a great start but seemed to lose some focus toward the middle.

I believe you had a good opening start. This really captures the topic and gives the feel of giving up and trying again. I really liked the clever word play.

"Broken again...all my hopes they just go with the wind
like I give a damn, I'm hoping this second breath poses as a friend
give me a hand...especially when we close to the win
I fall back, let it fadeaway...thats when I start choking again"


Overall this was a hard one to decide but I liked breathlesses word play and multies a little more.

Vote - breathless