Enjoyed this one heaps Innovator. The interesting thing about it is the tone of the language, it is kind of naive. E.g., " looking for shoe ins, always a foot in a foot out " the tone was describing this cumbersome copperbot (Robot?) with a kind of simple charm. Perhaps the actual title and the name 'cumbersome' contributes to this effect. Pretty certain it was intentional (like the ending "Do not give in") gives a big clue. Thought you maybe lost that interesting tone a bit towards the end when you started writing about leeches and blasphemous speech. Regardless, it was still nice to read.
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