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Old 10-01-2013, 10:46 AM   #2
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This was a pretty dope short little piece here. But I do have some complaints.

worse then lethal, no regret for past actions
on the beat ya know the flows gotta have traction
^^Ironically on this bar that talks about flow the flow was a little off to me. It's not that big of a deal as I do the same from time to time but try to match the syllables together for a good flow.

Besides some minor hiccups here and there on the flow I enjoyed this. Cool little story fella. Go drop some feed on other posts if you expect more feed for yours, and welcome.
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