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Old 09-29-2013, 11:48 PM   #12
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Tbh I was kinda disappointed in both verses, I really expected more from such proficient writers. Zen I enjoyed your flow a ton but I felt you focused way too much on the rhymes an flow an neglected the actual story an keeping it relevant with itself with the character tenses an changes.
Rawn yours was okay but the story was kinda...blah tbh. Flow was good but rhymes were simple an kinda unoriginal really.
I gotta vote for zenland on this because between two uninspiring verses his was more sound technique wise
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