Athiest- My former Exoskeleton amigo you were rushed with time and were unable to come with a complete verse and I wish you had the time to finish this because what you did have was well written my friend. Hopefully next week we'll get to see you with time in your favor.
patrown- Hello my protégé. I'm calling you that not because I trained you, but because I want to seem like I trained you because you've progressed allot since the last time I read you. Nice verse. This seemed like a story of duty (haha) over everything else. Men are forced to do what they're told regardless of whether it's right and they're now suffereing from the consequences of that. Good little story and a nice flow. Good job.
V/patrown.
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