YDK, liked the angle on the topic... I think it was pretty straightforward but you gave it some nice depth and it resonated in the end... the man's palace is washed away because he has left nothing behind.. you conveyed the regret well... some nice lines...
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Because the worst thing about life's lessons, is you die once you learn em.
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Again, fairly straightforward, but nicely executed piece.
Scripter. I liked the flow and feel of what you did, but I felt it was way too short to take me anywhere. The descriptions were nice, except a few misplaced word choices for me...
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the only true home of free
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what keeps dreams and hoping key
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merciful humor only seen through the eye in thee
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Shit like this just sounds so awkward and takes away from anything else you do, imo.
Vote - YDK