[Mike Wrecka]

ok cool battle. two very different takes on the picture.

vivid - you have a definite unique style to your stuff man. which is a compliment. your not a clone. your stuff is different which I like , its refreshing. this verse was kinda abstract. tbh ive read it once and im not really sure what its about. you described the picture and the feeling it gives someone looking at it quite well though.
you had some really stand out lines that impressed me like

So follow to lead... where shadows in this hollow of trees swallow the leaves...

that was awesome

A smooth facade this fog that cloaks the perils resident to this infinite space.

so was that. overall, try to focus your thoughts a bit more. and build on ideas with more than just a line. like describe that fog more, use another few lines to tell us about it. that's what you are missing to me. good verse though

inno - this was unlike your usual style. you went more for a poetic vibe, which is not who you are as a writer from the stuff ive previously read from you. the problem with poetic verses is that they seem simple in structure often. and this leaned towards that. I liked the storytelling aspect though. but tbh you didn't incorporate the picture in any way until the last line. unless im just missing something which is possible. but if i am missing the overall arching theme of this piece and how it relates to a bridge i would say that you made it too obscure. you tied it in at the end but it didn't really do much for me. like this verse could have been written for a different topic that was no showed and then you added the last line to relate it to a bridge. not saying you did that but ya . it was solid though don't get me wrong. I appreciated it for what it was. but I have to say that you tried a new style and for me, it didn't work. sorry broski . we are still bffs but this week I have to go with

vote - vividly vague

good battle guys thanks for the reads