[Mike Wrecka]

ok cool battle fellas.

ydk - I liked the approach. the sand castle representing what you wanted in life but never was able to achieve because you focused on other things. cool concept.

This "legacy" I was creating is just material and fictitious,
A life long fantasy full of missed chances and lost wishes.
"Pity me" thoughts in my brain that are harder to get rid of than vermin,
Because the worst thing about life's lessons, is you die once you learn em.

this was powerful to me. I think these are definitely the best lines of your verse.
which got better and better as it moved along. like you picked up steam. focus a little more on the introduction or story lead in next time and you have a very dope verse. overall it was an enjoyable read.

scripter- your a good writer. that's evident. this verse for me in a topical league, captured the vibe of the pic, but kinda didn't really go anywhere. you created a feeling of enchantment though and that was appreciated.

and the tides that push and pull pieces so peacefully

I liked that line. liked how pieces and peacefully play off each other

in the end though it wasn't a cohesive or fully fleshed out telling of this topic. it needed to be longer and i think that held you back. elaborate next time

good battle. scripter had the better vocab and rhyming mechanics but ydk told a complete vision. scripter needed to write more for this. and for that

vote - ydk