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Old 09-27-2013, 10:01 PM   #17
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The rhyme scheme on here is pretty slick
I'm enjoying the vibe I'm getting from this too
the multis were placed together pretty well
the vocab was on point for the piece as well
seemed like a different approach for you
either way keep writing breh
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