Athiest - Solid verse here. vocab was excellent. technically I found it lacking. However extremely descriptive making it for a very interesting enjoyable read. with a little technical flair to your verses I think you would be much more of a threat here. just my opinion. good verse.
Patrown - tight lines, your flow was nice. great wording, showing that bars can be short and say lots.
men succumbing to the times, forever humbled.
^ niiiiice..
a few really nice quotable lines in here. short and sweet, but nailed in perfect.
Vote - Patrown. I felt he just edged this with a tighter flowing verse, which with all aspects combined gave his verse a little more oomph.
props to both.
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