Vulgar
Terrific piece. This was pretty seemless, awesome metaphorical description throughout. I read this several times, and it sounds better every time. Good stuff.
Adonis
This entry was dope. I could sense a bit of narrative anger as if telling it
after the fact. I was very into it and, like Vulgar's, it was almost
flawless. Almost. I only had a problem with some rhyming being off:
(i.e. "graves,estates";
Dirt air floating; ash made including Jesus,
The best known thesis is 'save the best for last',
Understand past was once futures shoot of craps,
But more Tobacco then Oxygen created a relapse.
Dark and musky, the forecast is Cloudy,
So touchy, because the subject's you abruptly).
Overall, fucking incredible. Same angle, but different minds exploring
this apocalyptic drama and the culprits behind it. Both well-written
with bomb ass closers, but there were, seemingly no rhyme flaws in
Vulgar's joint. This was too good of a battle for me to judge this without
reading several times. Thanks guys for making this interesting. MVGT VULGAR. Great job.
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