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Old 09-25-2013, 11:55 PM   #6
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lmao Vulgar's verse was nasty as fuck. Started and ended dope. Only part that seemed slow in comparison were the last 4 bars of the opening stanza, I don't think books have heads but it still left an indelible vulgaresque signature which is always a good thing. Ending was dope af, creativity out the asshole.

Adonis I enjoyed the cadence of your verse. Some dope lines:

Mammal's built an ark for the right of passage,
Glorifying stars instead of recognizing madness,
Eye's open...Eye's burn,
Earth spins as 'our' stomachs all churn....

^^ ill...I took this to mean humanity irreparably damaged earth to the point where leaving Earth was the only option left. It's an interesting question, I just peeped a youtube about how humanity could create a spaceship which holds 250,000 people and travel at a reasonable fraction of the speed of light (about 7%) if we all worked together to build such a structure within 100years. Supposedly, it's actually a project which might be plausible with our current technology. Anyways, I appreciate the fleshed out verse. The concept of humanity as "god" beings who choose to suffocate the Earth is cool.

I thought a lot of Vulgar's imagery just stood out in a standout way here and his ending was dirty. I'm gonna give it to him.

V/ Vulgar
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