YDK
I wanted a family, maybe a dog; a faithful wife and a son,
I needed a father growing up
so my whole life I've dreamed to BE one!
^dope
Your verse got stronger and stronger as it progressed with the questions on the meaning of life, 'you only know when you're dead', and the regrets of life that we all face were laid out here. If I had just read the first few lines, which were slow and uninteresting to me, I would've never caught the emotion you laid out in the last few. Really the ending of this verse sold it to me. Good drop.
Scripter
I didn't find any bars that stuck out but nonetheless this was a nice drop and I was pleasantly surprised by it. You have a very poetic feel which is something I don't remember from reading your cypher posts before. I liked it except for a few lines. Tightening/righting is a stretch for a rhyme, and I lost the flow because of that. But I can see you have allot of potential. Keep it up.
V/YDK
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