Boredem
u vs me is not fair, and it's obv ur shook cause son
i'll give amateur of his gravesite just to prove u are that and will be put in one
--stretched and forced... shudda been worded better
dawg i'm beasting and u can trust that all believe me
u don't even have the buzz of a fly on the wall, so for me to squash u is easy
--filler, but cool punch...
u never get pussy u ugly fucker, u can count he's on the run
cuz if a bitch ever get's ammonia she would want to drown her self in some
--another stretched and forced nameplay, but a hit nonetheless
ur ya own worse enemy, a lame to soft to brawl
it's ironic how u tried to throw shots at AK but ended up w/ ur brains on the wall
--ok punch, better execution, personal
i'm catchin this dub w/ EASE, that is something u can bet g
no way i'm losing to a whack noob whose lost every battle he's been in on netcees
--very filler, lackluster finisher, lazy, must have known you would win for sure.
Overall, run of the mill mass produced type battle verse. No Ooh's and Ah's. You knew you would win and you pulled a Mayweather: a lotta peacocking with lame punches. Be impressive REGARDLESS, if you're capable.
Ammo
i'll take a 2x4 to boredom and brag about how i board him,
then if he say i didn't, i'll do it again while his bitch recordin,
--this had a lot of punch potential, underutilized, meh
yea i may not be the best, but you said you'd help me,
you couldn't help me if i was on a 10 story bout to make the street gory,
--didn't help yourself here, only use introspect if you're gonna flip it properly...
end of story, you bore me, better yet go ahead ya bitch adore me,
i'll send you a poster and custom made 40 with my pic and your sis on it fuckin with funny faces just to be corny,
--Overly broken down, forced, stretched. Concise and precise is what you should go for.
when it's all said and done you gonna die a horrible death,
final destination embedded in me says your gonna turn left,
--Mehhh... potential, but underutilized again. This one cudda been good.
which ain't right, cause it will end you up on a milk carton easily,
missing, but nobody cared about board, just card board & vitamin D.
--You need to read more battles and learn mechanics and proper nameplay/wordplay methods.
Overall, difficult time managing your thoughts into potent content. It seems you would be better off learning a better rhyme and scheme construction first, then getting into battle mechanics. Stay hungry, and maintain focus.
MVGT Boredem, damn near by proxy....
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