I'm stoned and will give you no mercy.
I have two words you need to become a better writer.
Word number one: Punctuation. I don't know what the fuck is happening when there is one huge fucking run on sentence. Use commas to signify pauses.
Word number two: Dictionary. When someone spells I'd as ide, or tales as tails, I can not and will not take them seriously.
All in all this was a jumbled mess which could be really cool, maybe.
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