I can tell you didn't put a whole lot of thought into it. it reads like a keystyle going from a direct matter-of-fact approach to a more descriptive and imaginative one then to a more metaphorical ending. the flow was ok. off a bit in some lines and rhyme scheme could've been a little more intriguing. but all in all this wasn't a bad piece. i'll look for more of your work in the future to see what you do when you put in some real effort
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