It is disappointing to see so few comments, hopefully some more votes are received, both of you have competed 100% throughout.
For MikeWrecka is this a rhyme format version of the animation movie? If so good effort, but it lacks a bit of ambition perhaps. It is a good comment to compare reflection/introspection to your children. As you state at the end there "a living reflection of ourselves is in our children" - must agree with that, although I can't personally relate to it. Overall, the payoff at the end felt too delayed, perhaps it would have been more effective to cut back the analogy/tribute to the childhood story and introduce this comparison of children to self-reflection idea earlier.
For Certain this was exactly the kind of conceptualization I was hoping to see in the final week. Some overarching self aware construction, the sum of its parts becoming greater than a whole or whatever. Individually, the small sections are short so they lack the effect when compared to your earlier submissions on the same topics, but together and when combined with the conversational and cynical writing tone it was just great. I enjoy the Legal Latin part thought it was the strong point, the constrained task had the word OR, but its really not important when compared to the idea behind it. The specific usernaming and shaming that occurred in the imitation task was well done as well. Voting for Certain.
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