[Mike Wrecka]

cool battle guys

ydk - seemed to take the direction and inspiration of the words unshackled and reflection and decided to make it the start and ending of his verse. the middle was basically a reflection on society and on oneself and reaction to it. the structure of the writing was simple. but not in a bad way. in a very appealing way. it would sound nice spoken aloud. some critiques, the rant on societies flaws have been overdone and this didnt break any new ground on the topic. you needed to dig deeper and be more specific. funnel your thoughts a bit more. and this was too short. good piece though.

pent up - ok another storytelling verse from you. it was a good story. an interesting story. your pretty good at writing the story arc, which some people miss the mark on. the writing was sound, no complaints there. i think the character you created was pretty creative. i liked the direction. it was just kinda anti climatic in some way. if you think of it this character you built up just meets another character that we are introduced to very briefly , we really dont know who he is much,that part lacked descriptiveness, and then slips him drugs and kills him. meh. maybe you got sick of writing. it fell flat for me.
and i dont really see how this related to the topic in any way. maybe the homeless man is a reflection of societies ills. or tolerance week because tolerate those that are homeless when we should really help them out more.

tough battle because the topic was so open ended. if this was a single topic week i would have voted against pent because tbh i feel like he ignored it, but those loopholes i listed above could all be his true meaning of this verse. and his writing was better and more developed as a whole so

vote - pent up

thanks for the reads guys