i dont think its the length no good. its kinda a rhyme about nothing. its a flex piece. which is cool to do on audio, but a little boring to read. so to make up for that you need some sick metaphors and complex rhyme scheme. this didnt really have either tbh.
dont get me wrong im sure it would sound dope on a track. it did have its moments though
cause what im writin like..
Is fight night when mike tyson fights..
Something hype
i enjoyed the scheme there. even though mike tyson doesnt fight anymore. lol damn you said be easy and being harsh. my bad
good to see you posting again. hopefully you get involved in some topical tournys and or leagues. you know im a fan of your work brother. pz.
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