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Certain · 09-05-2013, 02:21 AM

@Phuck Yew, @Sharp Nine and @Meth, did y'all think about just voting in this instead of upping it a million times? Or at least cleaning out the thread so that it doesn't look like it has 10 votes already?

Anyway, I'm going to keep it short like the verses because I've obviously read better from both of you.

Objective: You played this really straightforward and with more than a little homophobia, so I didn't really enjoy the approach. Also, holy fuck your lines were long. And for a short verse, it got surprisingly redundant in the middle. In short, I was not impressed, which is a shame because in the past you've definitely impressed me.

Innovator: Well, at least you flipped it, and the flow was a bit smoother. I didn't actually find your approach or writing funny, though, and again, I've read much better from you. But I liked that you thought of a way to take a less obvious approach, and that twist allowed your verse to be less repetitive.

Vote: Innovator

09-05-2013, 02:21 AM	#11
Certain Mad fucking dangerous. Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 12,066 Battle Record: 40-19 Champed - AOWL Season 3 - Art of Writing League (2x) Rep Power: 85899406	@Phuck Yew, @Sharp Nine and @Meth, did y'all think about just voting in this instead of upping it a million times? Or at least cleaning out the thread so that it doesn't look like it has 10 votes already? Anyway, I'm going to keep it short like the verses because I've obviously read better from both of you. Objective: You played this really straightforward and with more than a little homophobia, so I didn't really enjoy the approach. Also, holy fuck your lines were long. And for a short verse, it got surprisingly redundant in the middle. In short, I was not impressed, which is a shame because in the past you've definitely impressed me. Innovator: Well, at least you flipped it, and the flow was a bit smoother. I didn't actually find your approach or writing funny, though, and again, I've read much better from you. But I liked that you thought of a way to take a less obvious approach, and that twist allowed your verse to be less repetitive. Vote: Innovator __________________ I'm just swinging swords strictly based on keyboards, unbalanced like elephants and ants on seesaws.