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Old 02-08-2013, 08:10 PM   #3
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she caught me mid-sentence and said
she'd known me before, dishonest at best,
but hidden inside a promise was expressed
conscious, unscripted, tied at opposite ends,
then just pretend that it'd always been tied.
hands slightly misaligned-
take a moment, revel in infinite time,


ok, yes. this was a dope piece but like flo said, i think you played it too safe
but, not to the point where it ended up sounding choppy or basic. just to the
point where you could kinda tell that the schemes couldve been super crazy..
still nice tho fam, i'd just stay keep working and take risk! lol
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