Your flow is great. It's very natural. The rhymes in this seem less forced than sometimes is the case with your writing. And the energy is there stronger, too. The whole rap as a girl thing has been done 1,000 times, and this wasn't a substantially unique take to it. But sometimes the well-trodden metaphors are so for a reason. You could do better with cleaning things up with your wording. The Kendrick Lamar line seemed out of place and poorly phrased. And the early part wasn't as focused, though I liked it. This was good, though, as always.
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