[Geno]

Cold fusion.
Honestly not really impressed. Schemes were off imo. Concepts weren't very clear and very broken up. Structure and mechanics in general were just not very good

Mnemonic.
This held together a lot better as far as schemes. Content was cool in some places, broken and hard to follow in others. Mechanically it was better.. I still feel like you can do more if you could just maintain one solid concept and try not to delve into so many others at the samme time.

Battle.
Cool flex type of verse. Had some seriously unnecessary runon lines in it though. Ur pretty scattered in your ideas. As goofy as some of your immagination can be at times, I thought this shit was crazy enough to be qoutable..
I cut down any thought the sun will come out like Orphan Annie turn red headed step child a mule

Massacre.
Yet another set of gory style horrocore lines. Pretty unpredictable to say the least.. which is a definite bonus, but it may also be your downfall at the same time. Everything seems so off the wall thus far.
Another qoutable though.. imo anyway.
hardly pouring, your not imploring your going Mary whoring in mourning

Boogeyman.
Thought this piece was dope as fuck tbh. Had a smoother flow and transitions worked. A little simple in scheming at times and even over used the same word endings at times as well. But storywise and concept wise you staye on point and it wasn't such a random cluster fuck of insanity. Much better here

Publicity.
This started off raw as fuck imo. These lines I'm about to qoute were pretty ill.
Look at this world in its insanity…. Hollywood dolls an all the vanity…. The system taking our rights blinding people, redefining equal…. Rain men and women… predicts of the rise of evil…. Sick of publicity, and all the pseudo show, popping wheelies Entertainment nothing like the days of Kenevil though, They don’t want your broken bones they want your soul, It’s Mortal Combat in the Garden of Eden… hoe
(Responding from phone, excuse the format of qoutes) ..thought that section was crazy. Then it started to get forced and felt like you lost interest or inspiration or what have you.. but I'm seeing an evident increase in talent as the pieces go by.. perhaps these were written along the course of a spread out time span in which your experience as a writer picked up in between each piece? That's my thought on it anyway.

I skipped through reality and and no sleep from wake. Seemed like more of your first piece and I just wasn't interested.

I can't fail was cool. Had a good format, schemes were a little off.. but my favorite line of every other line I read was in this verse lol. Let's try to guess what line that was??? Lol

An some people be hating more then Hitler when genocide failed
Ya.. loved that shit, naturally lmao

So there you go man. Thanks for posting, be sure to drop feed on as many peoples posts as you can. And next time, don't make such a long post. IT WILL GET SLEPT ON. People see length and immediately close threads because of it. Go smaller.

And remember... when it comes to text -it always quality over quantity. Keep that as your main formula and you will never fail.

Peace