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Certain · 09-01-2013, 03:21 PM

I'm going to apologize now for a briefer-than-usual vote. I'm a bit busy today, but I wanted to get something in, especially since this battle needs more votes. (@PancakeBrah, @Pent uP, @Pinot Grij, @Nigma, @Adonis, @zygote, @Innovator, @Objective, @Mr. J, @PiE, @The Artful Salopian.)

Aesthetic: You definitely echoed Plot's style from that one verse. But you did so in a very generic way. The content and the diction simply bored me. You entered this league on an unusual week, and I'm looking forward to seeing you write more to your own style in the future.

Plot: I enjoyed your verse, but you sort of shirked the topic by writing in your own style about one of your opponents. This might have been the best verse of the battle, but it didn't make sense within the confines of challenge. I liked the approach, and it would have worked well (and won you the battle, probably) had you then used Mike Wrecka's more straight-forward narrative style to tell this story.

Mike Wrecka: This verse was just ill and kind of hilarious. It's like you knew exactly how over the top these similes and metaphors were but just kept piling them on until they went from seeming like broken, bad poetry to sort of a mockery of it. It also helped that this flowed better than anything I've read from you. The scheme and rhymes were on a higher level than you tend to use for story telling, and that was appreciated. And the end was great, too. I liked the satire, and it made sense to do it using that Aesthetic sample as your basis.

Vote: Mike Wrecka

09-01-2013, 03:21 PM	#10
Certain Mad fucking dangerous. Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 12,066 Battle Record: 40-19 Champed - AOWL Season 3 - Art of Writing League (2x) Rep Power: 85899406	I'm going to apologize now for a briefer-than-usual vote. I'm a bit busy today, but I wanted to get something in, especially since this battle needs more votes. (@PancakeBrah, @Pent uP, @Pinot Grij, @Nigma, @Adonis, @zygote, @Innovator, @Objective, @Mr. J, @PiE, @The Artful Salopian.) Aesthetic: You definitely echoed Plot's style from that one verse. But you did so in a very generic way. The content and the diction simply bored me. You entered this league on an unusual week, and I'm looking forward to seeing you write more to your own style in the future. Plot: I enjoyed your verse, but you sort of shirked the topic by writing in your own style about one of your opponents. This might have been the best verse of the battle, but it didn't make sense within the confines of challenge. I liked the approach, and it would have worked well (and won you the battle, probably) had you then used Mike Wrecka's more straight-forward narrative style to tell this story. Mike Wrecka: This verse was just ill and kind of hilarious. It's like you knew exactly how over the top these similes and metaphors were but just kept piling them on until they went from seeming like broken, bad poetry to sort of a mockery of it. It also helped that this flowed better than anything I've read from you. The scheme and rhymes were on a higher level than you tend to use for story telling, and that was appreciated. And the end was great, too. I liked the satire, and it made sense to do it using that Aesthetic sample as your basis. Vote: Mike Wrecka __________________ I'm just swinging swords strictly based on keyboards, unbalanced like elephants and ants on seesaws.