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Old 09-01-2013, 06:53 AM   #5
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This was loaded with one liners, for the most part. I thought the "yield sign" invocation was brilliant. Because of the fragmentation, a lot of my favorite lines were followed by ones that I didn't enjoy as much, either because the rhyme seemed forced or stretched or because the concept just wasn't as interesting. It's tough to build real consistency in a verse like this, though.

My favorite stretch:

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Life force is wretched. Sifting through my minds mortal essence
Fuse-burning my arms, using cyborg genetics
Consquence'll catapult. Populace. Build Castle with bricks
Godly flesh, laced with grapplin hooks' like Michaelangelo is
Flammable lips. One slip from my tongue' I'm hardly provoking.
Hollow the oceans. Swallow the chakra from lava and molten
Evolve into Vulcan. The Dalai Lama of cokeheads.
Prophet has spoken. Unparalleled. Embody the flesh of the Pharaohs throne
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