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Old 08-31-2013, 04:10 PM   #16
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I notice the 'tedious' for it's condescension. Quit being so sensitive. It's not a good look.

Weak lines;

"Damn, it's like ya summoned from a dungeon how you creep up the steps
You think you're something but you're nothing.. The Placebo Effect"

Ok, Drake. Done before, not creative. This would've been better had you just said 'Placebo effect' regarding the subject at the beginning of the line and gone somewhere different with the idea.

"Tarots cards are truthful, pay off the tariffs for my rule breaking
Tearing human brains I'm like a Pharaoh in a tomb awakened"

Imagery/idea doesn't work for me.

"It don't matter, regardless you'll be cloning my figure
A poets only limits what he knows and can deliver
If you hold that inner wisdom let it grow before you pick it
If your goal is to persistently bring growth to all your writtens
But you're focusing on winning, only know you'll never get it
Pathetic, they saying that all I do is flow?
Yeah, in my writtens it's potent
But that simple shit you quote
Is just a ripple in my ocean"

Ripple in my ocean was cool. Other than that this was hokey.

Just relaxed little guy. I was just dropping feed and your estrogen flared. It's understandable, I guess.
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